Monday, August 29, 2011

it's all yours, shorty

Oh, the ridiculousness of it all. To lose the business in a poker game. The shame seeps out of my pores as thick as water pours from a rat-clogged downspout. I give the fat little man the deed to my life up to now, exit by a color-drained alley, hiding my embarrassment with a dry umbrella like a neurotic movie star dodging flashbulbs sneaking out for a sack of donuts, and ride away on a stolen bike used only once by a humorless hair-bun widow carrying a little trembling dog in a wicker basket. Squeak squeak squeak.

Red Umbrella
~Christopher Shay

12 Comments:

Blogger M. A. S. said...

Good take on the picture. I love the -squeak squeak squeak- at the end.

8/29/2011 2:05 AM  
Blogger Lazidaisical said...

I really like this. Great interpretation.

8/29/2011 4:28 AM  
Blogger Brian Miller said...

ha. great descriptions...nice use of sound too...it concretes it well...and i hope her name was not dorothy...smiles. nice mag.

8/29/2011 9:57 AM  
Blogger Helen said...

Your words flow, beautifully!

8/29/2011 12:13 PM  
Blogger Tess Kincaid said...

Were they little chocolate donuts? Seriously good, Phil, as always. I had to read it out loud.

8/29/2011 12:50 PM  
Blogger Berowne said...

Creative, and really different, take on the prompt.

8/29/2011 5:01 PM  
Blogger HyperCRYPTICal said...

Clever Magpie - love it!

Anna :o]

8/30/2011 8:54 AM  
Blogger Mimi Foxmorton said...

VIVID!
;)

~Mimi
www.collagepirate.blogspot.com

8/30/2011 9:40 AM  
Blogger Theresa Milstein said...

I like how you brought the bike into the story too.

8/30/2011 9:45 PM  
Blogger Trellissimo said...

Good use of all the elements in the picture. Very pleasing Magpie.

9/01/2011 6:41 AM  
Blogger Arnab Majumdar said...

This one had a touch of Noir to it... probably accentuated by the tone of the picture. Nice read!

Cheers,
Arnab Majumdar on SribbleFest.com

9/02/2011 8:36 AM  
Blogger ds said...

Ha ha! squeak squeak Great magpie-thank you.

9/02/2011 4:06 PM  

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