Sunday, January 20, 2013

balance act

Traversing along a polished stone tableau
across a gurgling dark creek
or a melting deer-tracked stream

You're better off alone
avoiding the well-intentioned hand
assuredly knocking your balance askew

But there are worse things that can happen
besides small shoes and socks
weighted with frigid water.


Blogger Karen S. said...

Perfectly written- lovely prose- but, I vote for better to share then be alone!

1/20/2013 10:52 PM  
Blogger Berowne said...

Artful and appealing. Well done.

1/21/2013 5:37 AM  
Blogger SueAnn Lommler said...

Ouch! Cold toes...nothing worse! Ha!
Well done

1/21/2013 6:34 AM  
Blogger Listening Daisy said...

I like your poem's cold waters and how it fits in nicely with your background.

1/21/2013 11:30 AM  
Blogger Robyn Greenhouse said...

for sure there are worse things, but wet socks are pretty bad!

1/21/2013 11:43 AM  
Blogger Sue said...

This was nostalgic for me. I enjoyed the vivid picture you painted.


1/21/2013 3:36 PM  
Blogger Kathe W. said...

lovely image and I'll hold the hand even if I do get wet socks!

1/21/2013 3:50 PM  
Blogger Tess Kincaid said...

Charming and chilling at the same time...

1/21/2013 4:38 PM  
Blogger Helen said...

I enjoyed this ... reminds me of the hundreds and hundreds of times my sister and I had to cross a creek to get cows out to pasture for the day. We experienced a few cold toes and soaked shoes!

1/21/2013 9:40 PM  
Blogger Michael said...

clever imagery conveying a story with so few words

1/22/2013 9:39 AM  

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